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You told me she had died in a hospital bed
With her glasses on
So that she could see Death properly

And I picked away at my breakfast,
Which was pancakes and strawberries,
Trying to imagine
Her squinting ahead at Him
With her dying eyesight

The pancakes were dry and store-bought
And my plate was a pool of cold syrup
And flavorless,
Half-eaten strawberries
When I had finished,
And my hands were stained with the sweet blood

And you took my place,
Picking away at soggy crumbs.
I guess grief is dealt differently. 

EDIT: Oh my gosh! A DD! :dalove: Thank-you to the lovely GrimFace242 for featuring me! :clap: 
Thanks so much for your support, guys! I can hardly type! :D :happybounce: 

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Given 2013-12-01
Breakfast by ~Tigris42 ( Featured by GrimFace242 )
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
First of all... Congratulations on the DD! :la:

The work is beautiful and it deserved it! The starting stanza pulls the reader in and while it is free verse, there is a hint of rhyme and rhythm. I would have wanted to say a lot more but ah well ^^; it already has a lot of comments that probably say what I wanted to :)
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you!!
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome!
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takemetoverona Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Student Writer
There is a unique sense of voice created here, and you deal with the subject matter in such a human way. This really deserves the DD, congratulations!
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you, so much! :) I really appreciate your feedback! :hug:
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LibbyKeppen Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it!!  Great job!
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank-you! :highfive: 
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LibbyKeppen Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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Thatgirlontheinterne Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013  Student Artist
In my mind, pancakes represents emptiness,the pool of syrup represents tears, and strawberries represents bitterness, hurting in the heart. I like this very muchHug Llama Emoji 03 (Sparkles) [V1] 
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like it! Yeah, I'm trying to keep track of how many people interpret it differently. :) Thank-you! :hug:
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